I liked the story and the plot and characters especially how Belle was portrayed.
Ariana Loyfman
I enjoy how clear your storytelling was and the pace that you went in helps the audience keep up with each detail of the story. The only constructive criticism that I have is to try and add a bit more emotions in your tone. Nice job.
Kateryna Senkovych
I like the way that you read the shorter version of “Beauty and the Beast” and it does a great job summarizing the whole story. I also chose “Beauty and the Beast” for my presentation and chose a short version that differs from the Disney version.
Victoria Lucenti
Hi Vanessa, I really liked the pace you used throughout the entirety of your story! For both a younger and older audience, the addition of this was absolutely perfect in my opinion. The only thing I would suggest is to use more facial expressions while storytelling, I think it would really play a perfect part that ties into your pace of reading 🙂
ashley dai
Hi Vanessa! I agree with everyone here about how amazing your pacing is, it really allows us to flesh out the details in our head and we don’t have to be worried about missing any of the next words. As awkward as it can feel, I think you’re doing a really great job with eye contact for a read-aloud. There is also pacing in that regard, and the times that you choose to look at the camera feel very natural and friendly. I also appreciate the emphasis you put on certain words like: so, prisoner, despite, sad
Also– the way you read “but she didn’t mind” ; “let the beast go” ; “and the trees” were *beautifully* done!!
My suggestion is a struggle I share with you, which is minimizing uptalk. Emphasis on ‘minimizing’ and not ‘eliminating’
Uptalk is useful to resemble conversational tones and to maintain a sense of ease/engagement. But overusing it can diminish your power as the story’s narrator.
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5 responses to “Beauty and The Beast”
I liked the story and the plot and characters especially how Belle was portrayed.
I enjoy how clear your storytelling was and the pace that you went in helps the audience keep up with each detail of the story. The only constructive criticism that I have is to try and add a bit more emotions in your tone. Nice job.
I like the way that you read the shorter version of “Beauty and the Beast” and it does a great job summarizing the whole story. I also chose “Beauty and the Beast” for my presentation and chose a short version that differs from the Disney version.
Hi Vanessa, I really liked the pace you used throughout the entirety of your story! For both a younger and older audience, the addition of this was absolutely perfect in my opinion. The only thing I would suggest is to use more facial expressions while storytelling, I think it would really play a perfect part that ties into your pace of reading 🙂
Hi Vanessa! I agree with everyone here about how amazing your pacing is, it really allows us to flesh out the details in our head and we don’t have to be worried about missing any of the next words. As awkward as it can feel, I think you’re doing a really great job with eye contact for a read-aloud. There is also pacing in that regard, and the times that you choose to look at the camera feel very natural and friendly. I also appreciate the emphasis you put on certain words like: so, prisoner, despite, sad
Also– the way you read “but she didn’t mind” ; “let the beast go” ; “and the trees” were *beautifully* done!!
My suggestion is a struggle I share with you, which is minimizing uptalk. Emphasis on ‘minimizing’ and not ‘eliminating’
Uptalk is useful to resemble conversational tones and to maintain a sense of ease/engagement. But overusing it can diminish your power as the story’s narrator.